After getting more familiar with the story line provided thus far I found it to be rather disjointed without a clear goal for the main characters. It would require some heavy rewrites to before it could be solidified more. But despite that I had the idea to illustrate what one day in this persons life might be like in a mini slice of life narrative.
I thought it might be good to try and focus more on the juxtaposition between the world of the forest and the city. That in the forest the creatures he sees are benign and passive while the ones in the city are aggressive and combative. Reflecting the nature of the people around them.
I thought the narrative could start simply enough with the guy having run out of food and needing to venture into the city to buy more supplies.
As he crosses into the city the spirits he sees start to get rather pushy, as he fights them back the city goers around him think hes just insane. Eventually he makes it to the store to buy his supplies, as he returns to the forest the spirits all seem happy to see him again, while the city ones are sad (because they want to pick on him more).
I roughed out some boards after the jump check it out and see make your suggestions on things you might want to add or remove.
I thought it might be good to try and focus more on the juxtaposition between the world of the forest and the city. That in the forest the creatures he sees are benign and passive while the ones in the city are aggressive and combative. Reflecting the nature of the people around them.
I thought the narrative could start simply enough with the guy having run out of food and needing to venture into the city to buy more supplies.
As he crosses into the city the spirits he sees start to get rather pushy, as he fights them back the city goers around him think hes just insane. Eventually he makes it to the store to buy his supplies, as he returns to the forest the spirits all seem happy to see him again, while the city ones are sad (because they want to pick on him more).
I roughed out some boards after the jump check it out and see make your suggestions on things you might want to add or remove.
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ReplyDeleteAdded 2 more pages of Storyboards that will fit between some of the previous ones.
ReplyDeleteThe first page shows the photo of the girl and gives him a brief flashback of the girl smiling before returning to the main character feeling heartbroken.
The second page shows a possible way to fit the concept of hyperspace into the story by having the world trip out as he travels between the world of the forest and the world of the city.